What do you think of my lyrics?

Ive walked through misted fields with secrets there not yet revealed.

Leading slowly to the ocean where i see you and my soul is healed.

Its times like these my life seems short and ive sailed too far from port

but il always see you standing there glistening eyes and silver hair

Placid is this ocean that we rove with never ending motion

i search for only you, you see. Only to find you waiting beneath a tree

You never seem to leave my mind. I may love you to the end of time.

Time will stay and i may die. But im sure that in the skies weil fly

Cant you see my dear within these arms you'll never fear

and i know one truth here with me, you and me were truly free.

Oh, cant you see. That you and me are truly free.

Though life may be a short and sweet remedy.

Ive searched through misted fields. now i search with out a veil.

I seek with you by my side. Living forver upon our tide.

Moving together stride by stride. My love you are shall never hide.

What do you think of my lyrics?

its beautiful

but its like a poem

not lyrics

i mean...there is no chorus or verses or anything

What do you think of my lyrics?

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what lyrics....?

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wow, well done!

I bet they sound even more beautiful put to music =]

wish I could write like that lol.

What do you think of my lyrics?

It is quite lovely.

And you're right, instrumental bridges are just as good as choruses.

The lyrics are 'sad', but maybe quite in the way I'm thinking. In other words, I'm confusing myself. But, I really do like them~They rhyme coherently, and they don't seem forced like lots of lyrics is nowadays.

What do you think of my lyrics?

well... I really think there's so much rime.. and is also kind of cheesy.. just nice words that's it.. it doesn't really sound like a song, maybe a poem

What do you think of my lyrics?

Well I love it. I love how descriptive you made it. Becasue it is like a poem, I could hear the music though. I love how you don't have a chorus or verses. That's great! It gets so lame when people sing the same thing three of four times. I love it, I find it beautiful.

Keep it up.

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Awesome! These lyrics are amazing! Great job!

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The atmosphere is well described, and the song does trigger emotions, so well done.

But the subject matter is cliche and the rhymes are too obvious.

Still, you're definately a songwrieter, so keep on going!

What do you think of my lyrics?

It's good but it's leaning towards poetry not really to lyrics.

I think you should add a very short chorus that's repeated only 2 or 3 times. Yea, I get tired of choruses that gets repeated more than 4 times too. It's really good poetry though. I like how you found the words that ryhme and they all fit together.

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I like it a lot! It sounds like a great song.

What do you think of my lyrics?

Very nice. Keep it up.....

What do you think of my lyrics?

that is really nicely 'worded' or whatever..

i think this would be a nice

dark, kinda soft song [of ur genre of choice.]