Does anybody like my lyrics?

Climbing up a mountain standing collossal

Wondering if my mission is impossible.

Can I write lyrics that try to reach the nation;

without ending up in some police station?

I don't care for your opinionated reporters

who take less good advice than orders

Sometimes, I write so well I don't want opinions to ruin it

I get in a king's mindstate, sometimes, when I'm doing it

'cause when I tell you how I feel, I can hear them booing it

When I feel I'm shown love, and that someone adores it

I could break off something better than your poet laureate

and I support anybody who will show support for it

When I use my gift, people like to steal and extort it

I'm just filling the gaps, because poetry is porous

Free-stlye of my raps, it doesn't need a chorus

I walk a thin line, being held up by your crossed hairs

but, some notice, the way I play my words like an opus

So, I set my lyrics on the the right track, give a shove

when you hear it, it's returned, when you show some love

Does anybody like my lyrics?

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Does anybody like my lyrics?

try revising the rhyme scheme..but it has a very good over all idea

Does anybody like my lyrics?

i like it!

Does anybody like my lyrics?

I really like this one!!! I especially like "I walk a thin line, being held up by your crosshairs". If you scrap any of this (I don't think you should, but this is YOURS and you are obviously talented and know what's best), don't scrap that line!!!!

Does anybody like my lyrics?

Pretty cool. I actually found myself for a moment beatboxing aloud while reading the lyrics in my head. But Im always doing some sort of percussion cuz thats who I am and what I like to do.

Does anybody like my lyrics?

WoW really totally outstanding.you really are so talented you really could get into doing lyrics and be one of the top best,I too hear a beat when reading your words.and i would say you could be on your way...

Does anybody like my lyrics?

Well,that is creative.It's a hard job to express your feelings.You did great but too simple.Make it a bit more mystic.A bit more soft.It will work.

Does anybody like my lyrics?

change a few lines for example;

Can I write lyrics that try to reach the nation;

without ending up in some police station?

i don't like this line much^

i think re word this line

Sometimes, I write so well I don't want opinions to ruin it

i don't like how your talking about your lyrics and your writing if y ou change those parts or edit them out it would be alot better

good start though!