Opinion on some wierd lyrics that i wrote late one night?

Here they are, kinda short i wrote one time when i was tired, its just V C, constructive criticism please, they're probably not very good tho

Im watching you on the big screen

You are so special

Your everything i could need

Im so obsesive

Can I have a lock of hair

Can I get your picture signed

Can you write that i was there

Can I have a bit of your mind

Opinion on some wierd lyrics that i wrote late one night?

ladies, watch out for this sicko.

Opinion on some wierd lyrics that i wrote late one night?

Clay aiken's song has this similiar stalkerish tone to it.

But I wont criticize the subject i guess.

I wish I could hear it. It all depends on how you sing it.

Opinion on some wierd lyrics that i wrote late one night?

WOW! I like it.

When I was reading that, it reminded me of Duran Duran. The lyrics are very clever and etc. I'm a big fan of them and their lyrics - are ALWAYS good and atmospheric.

I like it and I wouldn't change it.

Opinion on some wierd lyrics that i wrote late one night?

I can't really hear the song... so... I'm only working with half the info but there okay. it's according to what kind of song your righting.

Opinion on some wierd lyrics that i wrote late one night?

i like it =]

Opinion on some wierd lyrics that i wrote late one night?

I like it, kind of creepy, like "I'll be watching you" by Sting. Its spelled "Obsessive" (I think!). Its really really good. Keep it up, I'd like to see the rest of it!

Opinion on some wierd lyrics that i wrote late one night?

I like them... they're short, but interesting so far.. :) What kind of music is supposed to go with them?

Opinion on some wierd lyrics that i wrote late one night?

O.o ... creep stalker lyrics..

DOEZ IT HAS A DOPE BEAT :D?

Opinion on some wierd lyrics that i wrote late one night?

Keep trying,

Opinion on some wierd lyrics that i wrote late one night?

The rhymes are cliche, and the subject manner is semi-unoriginal and boring because it seems to think it's more clever than it is.

Besides that, the presentation is well done, and you have potential. I only criticize because I think you can do better.